I am a student at South Hornby Primary School. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hey Nirvana, great slide. I really like the language you have used, words like chaos and massive make your writing interesting. I hope that the homes get rebuilt quickly, those poor people. Next time make sure you have got a sentence introducing your work and a sentence to ask a question at the end.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know more about
Hey Nirvana, great slide. I really like the language you have used, words like chaos and massive make your writing interesting. I hope that the homes get rebuilt quickly, those poor people. Next time make sure you have got a sentence introducing your work and a sentence to ask a question at the end.
ReplyDeleteHey, I like this slide and it is a very interesting story because this disaster happen recently. You should put a question and put The End.
ReplyDeleteThe End,
Kareem