In writing we have this called "can do" me and Arnicka we've writing a book called the split up its about a family that splits up because the mother gives birth on holiday and she has no idea about have a baby.
I will full you in about the story is done.
I am a student at South Hornby Primary School. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi Nirvana I like the name of your story it sounds interesting. maybe next time you could re read because things don't make sense in there. maybe you could also describe it a bit more. but I like the name I would love to read your story its sounds funny.
ReplyDeleteHI Ayla Thank you for your feedback I'm glad you like my story describe but you are fight I need to add more about the story as I want people to read my book.
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Bye, From Nirvana
Hi Nirvana Next time you could re read because there is a sentence that doesn't make sense. I would love to read your book as I haven't yet do you like writing these story's?
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